|Resume Cover Letter|
Resume Cover Letter
Dec. 31st, 2004 @ 10:46 am
If you were reviewing people's resumes and you saw this cover letter, would your interest in this person be increased or decreased? Why?
Dear [Recipient Name]:
Attached you will find my current resume, including information about my evolutionary growth with my current employer, XYZ Company.
As with all resumes, some of my achievements and direct contributions to in specific areas are outlined. However, this represents only a small portion of my overall contribution to the company… and hopefully to you. While I feel that my technical skills are exceptional and direct project and team contributions well above any measurable standard of excellence, the true scope of my contribution is much larger than this outline can demonstrate.
I find that my experience and intuitive understanding of both people and technology combine to create a value that surpasses the successes in my resume. Collaboration with my colleagues, understanding the unmentioned needs of my management, and increasing the knowledge and understanding with my team creates exponential value. Through helping everyone to achieve their best, to understand and constantly increase their value, the performance and contribution of everyone is increased, including my own as I learn as much as I share.
Ultimately the measure of success is not only what one person has achieved, but what that person can help others to achieve. I look forward to learning what amazing things we might achieve together.
He's either a pretentious ass who likes to use every big word he can to make himself feel superior over everbody, or he's a dumbass who whips out the thesaurus and doesn't understand when he's gone too far.
This letter would probably get someone an interview with me but I'd be negatively disposed toward them at the beginning. It gets my curiosity while simultaneously raising my bullshit shields to their near-maximum level. If they're truly as capable as they say, hey, good addition to the team but if they're as pompous as their writing .. I'd rather see them spray their synergy all over another company.
|Date:||December 31st, 2004 12:06 pm (UTC)|| |
Owen's red pen.
|(Link)|Something about the second paragraph is bothering me, perhaps it is the suggestion that your resume is somehow deficient. It has a negative conotation. If you have gone above and beyond the call of duty, mention that as an extra bullet in the resume. Then rearrange the letter so you are supporting that bullet, rather thenputting down your resume. "Make everything positive, don't put anything negative, your resume stands alone, it is great, blah blah blah. ;)" You should really push how great you are, above and beyond, in your interview.
The third paragraph is good, although some of the wording is off. "a value" makes no sence. "I find that my technical experience and understanding of people combine to create intuitive skills that surpass the success in my resume." ... is a suggestion.
Second sentence, the word colaboration is a different tence then the rest of the sentance which is in (ing). You probably should get rid of th e"ings". You also use the word "understanding" three times in two sentances, a couple of them need to go. Through helping, should by "By helping", cut "to understand" completely, is incrased to "has increased". Just use "including my own", skip the end of the line.
In a word: arrogant.
The point of a cover letter isn't to prop up one's resume. It is to let an employer know one's intentions and desires with respect to a job. Why one is applying, who referred one for the job, when one is available to start, compensation and salary if appropriate, etc.
This letter is totally useless for what it should accomplish, yet manages to make the author sound like a pompous jerk at the same time.
|Date:||January 1st, 2005 07:25 pm (UTC)|| |
You MUST be kidding
Who does this guy think he is? The letter and the resume would be tossed before I set down my coffee. Lawyers are old fashioned and somebody with an attitude like this would last perhaps thirty seconds. I would hate to have to explain to my colleagues why I even brought this flake in for an interview!
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